Document Localization and Editing

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I wrote Sample One in Italian and Sample Two in French and ran them through Google Translate.  This gives an approximation of English text written by a non-native speaker, with a few grammatical mistakes and misspellings thrown in.  The revision of these texts is as much about localization as it is about editing.

Sample Three is just a poorly-written piece of prose.  Not only does it need to be proofread, it can really use an overhaul -- much like text compiled by a native English writer to whom words don’t come easily. 

The revisions are presented immediately below each sample.


Sample One - Original
We are professional web site technicals for over 20 years. What do we do? So many thins. For our industrial customers, we seek ways to redirect and improve their business. For our clients individual we look to create web site and online presences to explain Their evaluation.

What we do for you? Contact us and find the answer together!

Sample One- Revised
We are professional website designers with more than 20 years of experience.  We offer several customized solutions.  For our industrial clients, we look for ways to expand and improve their current business model.  For individual clients, we create personalized web sites that enhance their online presence and clarify their values.

What can we do for you?  Contact us and let’s find the answer together!

Sample Two - Original
Hello all friends! We have returned from the travels, and we are very happy to finally be home. Personally, I thank you with all my heart a wish for good luck and your good courage  without limit. You helped us a lot, and when always we would feel most down and hopeless.

So I would like to say to all you of our past few days...

Sample Two - Revised
Hello friends!  We’ve finally returned from our travels, and we are very happy to be home.  I’d like to thank you personally for all your good wishes and your limitless encouragement.  Thank you from the bottom of my heart.  You helped us a lot, and always when we felt the most hopeless and depressed.

So, let me tell you about the past few days..


Sample Three - Original
There is a pen on the table.  This pen is black and silver.  It will help you write.  You should use a pen when what you want to write is something that should not be erased like a check or a signuture or something like that.  A pencil is better for things that need to be changed like crossword puzzles or math porblems but a pen is not.  We sell pens of all kings, you can right a message on them or your name and give them to clients.  Or keep the, for yourself.  We think you will ejoy our pens and the fine slection od pens we offer!    

Sample Three - Revised

There is a black-and-silver pen on the table.  Use a pen when you’re writing something that shouldn’t be erased, like a check or a signature.  A pencil is better for crossword puzzles or math problems - anything that might need to be changed.  You can personalize many of the pens we sell with your business name or a short message.  Give these pens to clients, or keep them for yourself.   We’re sure you will enjoy our large selection of fine pens!